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You are attending a course at an evening school. Write a letter to the director of the school with a complaint about the course. In your letter, you should: – Describe the course you are taking. – Explain what you do

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Dear Mr Stephen, I hope you are doing well. My name is Ulfi, and I am a student in an art program.
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 the teachers sometimes experienced some unexpected personal challenges that required their immediate attention. l deeply uncomfortable with the schedule that always changes every advancement.
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 the issue was felt by other students.
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, we were unable to enhance our skills properly, and I hope the letter become evaluation to entire procedure in the school.
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 if you, as the director, adjust
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 in the school. Parhaps add several teachers to our class might become one of the solutions. I sincerely apologise for the complaint. Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your understanding, and I hope to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Dia'Ulfi

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Say more about the art course, such as the class time, the teacher, and what you learn. Make the main problem clear: classes change or do not happen as planned.
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Explain what you do because of this problem. For example, say you miss classes, cannot finish work, or cannot plan your time.
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Ask for clear action, such as a fixed class plan, a new teacher, or early news when a class changes.
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Put one main idea in each part: why you write, the problem, how it affects you, and what you want the school to do.
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Use simple links to show the order of ideas: "Because of this", "As a result", and "I would like to ask".
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Some sentences are hard to follow. Use short, clear sentences. For example: "The class plan changes often. Sometimes teachers cannot come. As a result, we cannot learn well."
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You clearly write about a problem with changing class plans and ask the director to make the course better.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear greeting, a polite ending, and separate parts for the problem and your request.
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