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Some people argue that historic buildings should be preserved in their original form. Others argue that this is both inadvisable and impossible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
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argue that
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an argument about
 whether the historic
buildings
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 should be preserved in their original form.Some people claim that immaculate
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preservation
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others argue that
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wise or possible. In my point of view, it is essential to
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 the historic
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, but not eveything stay the same in the past.
Body paragraph 1
Advocates argue that the historic is valuable in many fields like literature, biology and even architecture. It serves
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irreplaceable
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 means we can not lose it. What's more, the historic
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 of interest.
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On the other hand
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, people argue that maintaining
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 in their original state is largely impossible and painstaking. The
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 degrade over a long time
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 it's hard to keep, repair and fix
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, the
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buildings
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low
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safety
 systems, which is inadvisable to
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maintain
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From my
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, we should
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 the preservation of the surface of the building but strengthen the inside.
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, not only can we protect the historic
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also
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Conclusion
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 all, neither the opponent nor the advocates are entirely
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. It depends on our view
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 it. A compromise is the most viable path forward.

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task response
Answer both sides in more detail. Explain why old buildings matter, and explain why keeping every part the same can be hard or unsafe.
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Make your own view clear from the start. Your main idea is good: keep the outside, but make the inside safe and useful. Explain how this can work.
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Add real or clear examples. For example, an old house can keep its old front while new fire systems, lifts, and strong walls are added inside.
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Develop each main point. Do not only say that buildings are valuable; say how they help people learn about the past, bring visitors, or show old building skills.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, first view, second view, and your view with a conclusion.
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Use linking words to show the path of your ideas: First, For example, However, As a result, and In my view.
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Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The first body paragraph should only explain reasons to keep buildings in their old form. The next should only explain why this may not be possible or good.
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Make the last paragraph more direct. Instead of saying both sides are not entirely right, state that careful repair is the best way because it keeps history and protects people.
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You discuss both views and give your own view, so your essay answers all parts of the question.
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Your idea of keeping the outside while making the inside safer is a clear and useful middle way.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, two body paragraphs, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful contrast words such as “On the other hand” and “Furthermore” to move between ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tangible connections
  • cultural heritage
  • architectural features
  • economically beneficial
  • safety regulations
  • environmental standards
  • functional facilities
  • significant alterations
  • integrating modern elements
  • extending lifespan and relevance
  • technical challenges
  • financially unfeasible
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