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The table and pie chart show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.

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The table and pie chart show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
The table and pie chart illustrate the number of
research
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students
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 in Australian universities
form
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from
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 2001 to 2010.
This
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 report aims to summarise the key trends, significant comparisons and notable changes highlighted in the data.
Overall
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, it is evident that female
in local
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students in local research
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research
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students
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 in 2010 experienced a marked
incerease
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increase
, with the highest value represented in local
researchstudents
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research students
,
while
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 female
in international
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students in international research
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research
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students
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 in 2001
represents
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 the smallest. Another notable trend is that the male and female
in local
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students in local research
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research
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students
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 in 2001
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 had identical percentages over the period.
Initially
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, the local
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students
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 in 2010 accounted for 39,488,making it the highest among all categories.
This
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 is followed by local
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 in 2001, which represents approximately 33,657, significantly lower than the largest category.
In contrast
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, the contribution of international
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students
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 in 2001 is relatively insignificant, with
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 of only 5,192.
Furthermore
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, a noticeable trend is the uniformity between local
research
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students
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 in 2001 and 2010, which both represent similar growth patterns over the period.
To sum up
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, the data highlighted the number of
research
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students
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 in Australian
unviersities
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universities
, with the most significant features standing out.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of
  • the total number of
  • research students
  • local students
  • international students
  • male students
  • female students
  • went up
  • rose
  • grew
  • increased to
  • fell to
  • made up
  • accounted for
  • the largest group
  • a smaller group
  • the gap between
  • compared with
  • in 2001
  • in 2010
  • over the period
  • from 2001 to 2010
  • there was a rise in
  • there was a fall in
  • remained the same
  • slightly
  • sharply
  • by contrast
  • while
  • overall
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