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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that the governments are considering what
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the best way to provide
houses
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 to their citizins.
This
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 essay will discuss which solution is better for housing , either by building
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taller buildings or building it in a wider area of land.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with , there are many benefits in
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constructing
 a house in huge piece of land.
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, it is more
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suitable
 for families with many members.
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, those
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 of
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 are known to have big
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,
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 will be the happiest in
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houses
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,
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its
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, one house could have a backyard, where they could play hide and seek and have other activities.
Body paragraph 2
In terms of taller buildings, it
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 in price
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because
 it uses less space. It is
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 type of
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 could fit those who live alone.
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, these apartments have easier access to the services around the city.
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, the park
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 they could have a picnic or the food delivery from the
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nearest
 restaurant.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there are many advantages in having a big house in
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 area,
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 it is spacious and comfortable for all the family members
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 their age. It is
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 true that
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sky-high
 buildings have their own charm. Because it is in the middle of the city, it
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convinent
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convenient
 to live where everything is accessible for the individual.
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, the hospitals, universities and other governmental institutions.

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task response
Give a clear answer to the main question. Say which plan is better in your view, and keep this view clear from the start to the end. At present, you show good points for both plans, but you do not choose one.
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Explain why one plan is better for a city, not only for one family or one person. You could compare land use, house cost, travel time, parks, and the need for homes.
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Your examples are easy to understand, such as a back yard for children and near services for people in flats. Make them stronger by showing how they prove your main view.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction with your view, one paragraph on tall buildings, one paragraph on houses over more land, then a conclusion that repeats your choice.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on one main idea. The first body paragraph is about large houses and families. The second is about tall buildings and city life. This is clear, but add a final line in each paragraph to link the idea back to your choice.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as 'Firstly', 'In addition', 'For example', and 'Moreover' help, but some links are not clear because the sentence after them has a grammar problem. Write shorter sentences so that the links work well.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion repeats both sides, but it does not end with a firm answer. Add one direct final sentence, for example: 'For these reasons, tall buildings are the better choice for most cities.'
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You discuss both tall buildings and homes built over a wider area, so you cover the two main sides of the question.
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You use real and clear ideas: space for large families, play areas for children, lower cost, and easy access to city services.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This gives the writing a clear basic shape.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful signposts, such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', 'For example', and 'In conclusion'.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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