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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their ‎own country. Nowadays, they have the opportunity to study abroad.What are the ‎advantages and disadvantages of this development?‎

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Introduction
Nowadays, students are able to study abroad
instead
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 of studying in their hometown. The change causes both disadvantages and advantages.
Body paragraph 1
Here are many advantages of the difference.
To begin
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 with, not only do foreign
countries
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 have unique
culture
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cultures
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 and
environment
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environments
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, which can broaden undergraduates' horizons, but
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 it enables them
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 new classmates. As different people
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 different
life styles
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lifestyles
, it's probable that studying abroad is fit to someone. What's more, going to other
countries
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 means sufficient
opprtunities
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opportunities
 and higher salaries
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 in high-developed place.
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, if you have study abroad experience, companies will
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 likely to employ you.
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 but not least, the western
countries
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 filled with locals who have authentic
ancents
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ancestors
 have the capability to
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 English faster and better.
Body paragraph 2
Although
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 studying abroad seems great, we still need to pay attention to the
potentional
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potential
 problems and issues.
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, it comes with
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loneliness
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anxious
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anxiety
, and
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 may be hard for students to
be
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apply
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calm down and
familiar
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familiarise themselves
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 with the environment.
Conclusion
Studying in various
countries
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 faces both opportunities and challenges.

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task response
Answer both parts in the same way. You give many good points about study abroad, but the part about problems is much shorter. Add two or three clear problems, such as high cost, being far from family, and trouble with a new way of life.
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Explain each main point more fully. For example, do not only say that study abroad can lead to better jobs. Say why: students may learn new skills, meet people, and show that they can live on their own.
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Use real or clear made-up examples. For example, a student who studies in Canada may improve English, but may also need to work part-time because fees and rent are high.
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Some ideas need to be more careful. Do not say that people in western countries help students learn English faster just because they are local. Instead, say that daily talks with English speakers can help students improve.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion. Give the disadvantages their own full paragraph, with more than one idea.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one clear main idea. Then add an explanation and an example before moving to the next idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to show the order of your ideas: First, In addition, However, For example, and In conclusion. Do not use too many links in one sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make the final paragraph sum up both sides more clearly. State that study abroad can be useful, but students should think about money, family, and how well they can deal with a new place.
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You address both the good and bad sides of studying abroad, so your answer stays on the topic.
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Your advantages include culture, new people, jobs, and English. These are useful and relevant ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, a paragraph on advantages, a paragraph on problems, and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as 'To begin with', 'What's more', 'Moreover', and 'Although' help the reader follow some of your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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