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The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.

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The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.
The
line
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 graph shows the
plullution
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pollution
 levels in London, micrograms per cubic metre from 1550 to 2000. The Sulphur dioxide and the Smoke were started
in
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apply
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around 1600
,
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 and ended in 2000 at the same time. In 1850, the highest
number
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amount
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 of the Sulphur dioxide was
arrived
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reached
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 at around 900, but the Smoke
line
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 only
has
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had
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 about 400
metre
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metres
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 in about 1880.
Then
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, the two lines were almost
sharp
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sharply
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 dropped between 1920 and 1990 at the same time.
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, the
line
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 of the Sulphur dioxide has
keep
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kept
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 the highest percentage than the Smoke
line
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 all over the year.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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