The bar chart below shows the number of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

The bar chart illustrates the number of male and female enrolment in different evening

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at an adult education centre, drama, painting, sculpture, and language in the year 2009. The pie chart demonstrates the

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of the

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who registered

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.

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language contributors accounted for the highest number compared with other male and female

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,

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the only

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that

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men

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exceeded

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women

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was in the sculpture

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. Most of the most of participant

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were generally 50 or over. In terms of

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it is clear that

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women

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language

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were double

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in the same

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. The difference between

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and

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was just 5

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in the painting

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men

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were 25 , and

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were 30. The drama

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accounted for 30

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, 10

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and 20

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. The sculpture

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experienced

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lowest

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members

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comapred

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compared

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it was

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just 15

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, 10

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and 5

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. Regarding the

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of these

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, obviously,

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participants

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in these different

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were about 50 or older , and they contributed at 42%. Followed by the

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between 49-40, which constituted 26%. The next

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were around 39-30, they were 16%. The

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between 29 and 20 experienced at 11%. The lowest

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were about just under 20

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they accounted for 5%.