Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is not appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
It is clear that
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animal testing is commonly used among researchers, especially
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on rats
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, rabbits, and monkeys.
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due
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to their similar organs to humans,
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people argue that it is not fair to use
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for testing,
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others argue it is
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necessary
for human inventions.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand, many scientists test medicines on
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before giving them to humans.
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. covid 19 vaccine, Scintests had no time to test it on
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first,
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and now many people experience side effects, which may be caused by
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unknown vaccine.
Due to
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that, some people support animal testing.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, it is inhumane to harm
animals
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who had no interfere on
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.
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, some companies use cosmetics on rabbits to test for
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allergic reactions.
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act can harm their eyes and damage their skin. On top of that, it is cruel and anti-animal, which is why it is prohibited in many countries.
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, animal testing can
also
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cause extinction.
Conclusion
In my opinion, there is no easy answer for
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problem, but I hope for researchers to find a replacement and a solution for
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cruelty. I stand with animal rights, and I believe everyone should.

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You answer both sides and give your own view. To make your view stronger, say clearly when animal tests may be needed and when they should not be used.
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Develop each main idea more. Explain how tests can make new drugs safer for people, and explain why animal pain is wrong. Your points need more detail.
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Be careful with the COVID-19 example. The claim that side effects happened because animal tests were not done is not clear or proved. Use a safer example, such as testing a new drug before a human trial.
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The point about extinction is too broad. Explain how testing could harm a kind of animal, or leave this point out and develop the ideas about pain and rights instead.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: opening, one side, the other side, and your view. Keep this good plan.
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Make the first paragraph clearer. It should say that the essay will look at both views before giving your opinion.
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Use linking words more carefully. For example: 'On the one hand', 'However', 'For this reason', and 'In conclusion'. Do not use a full stop after 'For example' when you want the next words to be part of the same sentence.
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Some sentences are hard to follow because of grammar and word choice. Write shorter, clear sentences. For example: 'Scientists often test new medicines on animals before they test them on humans.'
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You discuss the good side of animal testing for medicine and the bad side for animals.
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Your view is clear: you support animal rights and want other ways to test medicines.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraph order is easy to follow, and each body paragraph has one main idea.
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You use useful signposts such as 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In my opinion'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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