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The graph below shows the per capita consumption of whole milk and low-fat milk in the United States between 1970 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the per capita consumption of whole milk and low-fat milk in the United States between 1970 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
consumption
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 per capita in
gallons
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 of whole
milk
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 and low-fat
milk
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 in the United States between 1970 and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 whole
milk
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 decreased,
while
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 low-fat
milk
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 experienced a fluctuation.
US-citizens
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U.S. citizens
 consumed whole
milk
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 the most in 1970, but
this
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 changed in 1990,
where
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when
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 low-fat
milk
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 and whole
milk
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stood
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apply
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had a similar
consumption
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. After
1990
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1990,
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 low-fat
milk
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 had the highest
consumption
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. Looking first at the largest category in 1970. The figure for whole
milk
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 stood at 25
gallons
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 per capita
consumption
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 in 1970. It
then
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decline
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declined
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 gradually to 5
gallons
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 in 2015. After
1990
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1990,
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 compared to low-fat
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milk
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milk,
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 it was the lowest figure.
By contrast
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, the
consumption
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 of low-fat
milk
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 started at 6
gallons
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.
Then
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 rose to close to 15
gallons
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 in 1990, where it outdated to consume of whole
milk
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. Between 1990 and
2010
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2010,
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 the use remained similar.
Then
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 the
consumption
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 had a minor decrease to 14
gallons
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, but continued
the
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to be the
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 most consumed
milk
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 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, gallons, milk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • comparison
  • preference
  • significant
  • decline
  • rise
  • trend
  • gradual
  • surpass
  • pattern
  • shift
  • healthier options
  • approximately
  • amount
  • between
  • overall
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