You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Congratulate them on being accepted - Ask if they would like to be your roommate - Discuss possible activities you could do together

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Dear Ayushi, Hi! Long time no see! Hope you are doing great! I have some thrilling news to share with you

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I am going to Paris for my future studies!

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, I want to congratulate you on accepting a study abroad program in Paris, France. Since I know very well, you are very hard working person I have ever met in my life.

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, my uncle , who lives in Paris, informed me about the higher expenses of studying abroad, especially when it comes to accommodation. So, if you like, we can rent one room and share it between us to save some expenses for our future study.

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, I know very well that you love badminton. So, we will find some courts nearby, and we will play together. We will

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join a gym or any club to exercise to stay fit.

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, there is one good laboratory in our college to practice more after college hours. Awaiting your reply. Your friend, Zarana

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You cover all three parts: you say well done, ask to share a room, and give ideas for things to do. Make the first news line clearer, because both of you have been accepted. Say that you are happy you will study in Paris together.

task response

Use more natural words in a few places. Write “congratulate you on being accepted”, not “on accepting”. Write “share a room” or “be roommates”, not “rent one room and share it between us”.

coherence and cohesion

The letter has a clear start, main part, and end. To make it flow better, put the room question in its own short part and end it with a clear question, such as “Would you like to be my roommate?”

coherence and cohesion

Keep one main point in each part. The last part has badminton, a gym, a club, and a lab. The lab does not fit well with fun things to do together, so remove it or put it in a new part.

task response

You give clear and useful reasons for sharing a room: it can help save money.

coherence and cohesion

Your greeting and closing are warm and fit a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

164 words

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