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: The internet is a source of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn all over the world. Is all information on the internet reliable? What could be done to control information online?

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The
internet
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 is a good source of
information
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 and
opened
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 up opportunities for
people
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 all over the world. Is all
information
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 reliable online? What could be done to control
information
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 online? We can easily get new
information
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 from the
internet
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. The
internet
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 plays an important role in our lives.
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, not all
information
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 available online is trustworthy. Sometimes, we come across
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 false or misleading. Not all
information
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 is absolutely reliable. Because some
people
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 share wrong and fake
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facts
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 on social networks. Despite them, humans continue to rely on these facts fast.
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, they may make incorrect decisions. There are several ways to control
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 on the
internet
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.
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, governments should introduce stricter rules to prevent
people
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 from spreading false
information
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.
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, social media platforms should check the accuracy of posts and remove fake news.
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,
people
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 should learn how to identify reliable sources before believing or sharing
information
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.
As a result
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, the spread of misleading
information
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 could be reduced. There are several ways to control
information
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 on the
internet
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.
Firstly
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, governments should introduce stricter rules to prevent
people
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 from spreading false
information
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.
Secondly
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, social media platforms should check the accuracy of posts and remove fake news.
Moreover
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,
people
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 should learn how to identify reliable sources before believing or sharing
information
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.
As a result
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, the spread of misleading
information
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 could be reduced.

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task response
Answer both questions in more detail. Explain why some online news is not true, such as when people want views or money. Then explain how each plan can help.
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Add one clear, real example. For example, false health news may make people buy the wrong drug or not see a doctor.
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The last main paragraph is written two times. Remove the second copy and use that space for a short ending that sums up your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, a paragraph about false news, and a paragraph about ways to stop it. This makes it easy to follow.
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Use linking words with care. Words such as “however”, “firstly”, “secondly”, and “moreover” help, but make sure each one joins ideas in a natural way.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. In the first body paragraph, start with the reason false news is shared, then give its bad effect. In the next paragraph, give the ways to control it.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are not clear. For example, change “Despite them, humans continue to rely on these facts fast” to “However, many people believe this false information quickly.”
coherence and cohesion
Use the same words for the key idea. Choose “false information” or “fake news” and use it in a clear way, rather than changing between many similar words.
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You give a clear answer: not all online information is true, and you suggest useful ways to reduce false news.
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Your ideas about rules, checks by social media sites, and teaching people to check sources are relevant to the question.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is sensible: you first discuss the problem and then give solutions.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraph breaks and simple linking words to guide the reader.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repository
  • accessibility
  • credibility
  • regulation
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • biased reporting
  • public opinion
  • fact-checking
  • curate
  • digital literacy
  • discern
  • censorship
  • free speech
  • integrity
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