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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.

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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
The table and pie chart provide an overview of the statistics regarding
research
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students
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 in Australian universities between 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is crystal clear that the total number of
students
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 who are doing
research
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 has skyrocketed over the period.
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, there was a substantial change in the proportion of
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international and local scholars for both genders.
While
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 non-local
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 began doing more
research
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, the locals demonstrated a fall in 2010.
Initially
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 38.849 university
students
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 who were engaged in the
research
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 activity. Despite the figure for the international female
students
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 was 4% in 2001,
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occupying the bottom position, 43% was true for the locals. The value representing the local male was the leading category, thereby accounting for 44%,
whereas
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 for boys and men from
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 it stood at 9%. After 9 years, 54.081
students
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 started dealing with
research
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. The data indicating the intercultural student researchers was 12% and 15% for
the male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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, respectively.
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, only 35% of the Australian
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males
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 and 38% of the
female
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females
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 conducted
research
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 during the period.
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, the locals were still the most prevalent category compared to those from other countries.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of
  • the total number of
  • research students
  • local students
  • international students
  • male students
  • female students
  • went up
  • rose
  • grew
  • increased to
  • fell to
  • made up
  • accounted for
  • the largest group
  • a smaller group
  • the gap between
  • compared with
  • in 2001
  • in 2010
  • over the period
  • from 2001 to 2010
  • there was a rise in
  • there was a fall in
  • remained the same
  • slightly
  • sharply
  • by contrast
  • while
  • overall
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