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In many countries, people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could. Why do you think this is? What are the possible consequences?

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Introduction
In the
peresent
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present
 age,recycle become the most important issue around the world.
However
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, many
people
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 do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could. The truth is that
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 some
people
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 do not pay enough
attention
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 to recycling. At the same time, many
civilizations
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 are trying to raise
awarness
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awareness
 about its importance.They educate children fronm young
ages
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age
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 and use television and social media to encourage the public to recycle. Despite these efforts, recycling still does not
recive
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receive
 as much
attention
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 as it should, and many
people
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 continue to ignore
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this
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its
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 importance.
Body paragraph 1
In other words
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, they may not
underestand
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understand
 how their daily habits affect the
environment
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. In some countries, governments have made recycling more
conviniant
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convenient
, by providing
seperate
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separate
 bins for different types of
waste
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, so
people
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 do not need to buy their own
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special bins.In the other countries, economic difficulties and poverty make
people
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piorities
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priorities
 very
diversly
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differently
. Many
people
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 consening to have their basic needs than protecting the future
environment
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and
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as a result
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 , they may
less pay
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pay less
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attention
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 to how
damage their
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their waste causes damage
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waste
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 couses to their
surrounding
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surroundings
.
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, in Bangladesh,
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people becuase
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because
 of limited
waste
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 management
they
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, people
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 do not
acsess
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have access
 to
sperate
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separate
waste
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 collection
fasilities
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facilities
, even if they are willing to recycle.
Body paragraph 2
The
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consequences
 of
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this
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these
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 problems
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 can be so serious. First of all,
large
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 amount of rubbish
end of
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ends up
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 in
landfilles
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landfills
, which can
couse
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cause
 soil and
weather and
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apply
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water
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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, poor
waste
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 management can attract wild animals, rats and insects, increasing contact between animals and humans and potentially raising the risk of infection
deseases
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diseases
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, burning
waste
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 in the open air
release
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releases
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 harmful pollution that can
couse veriaty
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cause various
 lung diseases,
such
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 as asthma and can increase the risk of developing lung cancer.
Body paragraph 3
Beside
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 all the points
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 above
it
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, if I were to name one country that
genuelly
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genuinely
cares about the
environment
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 and makes
dedicates
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dedicated
 efforts to protect it, Japan would be my choice.Japan has developed a highly
to
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efficient
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waste
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 management
through
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system through
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strict
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strict,
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 organised
waste
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seperation
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separation
 facilities.
they
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 have a commitment and
resposibility
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responsibility
 to educate their
people
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 and protect their
environment
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becuase
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because
 of their policies.
Conclusion
In conclusion, recycling is essential, but it
matter
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matters
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 to
what
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the
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 country
people
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 live in, the policies and their piority is more important. Unfortunately, despite
this
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 significant impact on human health and the
environment
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. It often
recive
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receives
 less
attention
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 than it
deserve
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deserves
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. Every
pieces
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piece
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 of rubbish that can put a living being at risk.

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task response
Answer both parts more directly. Give clear main reasons first, such as a lack of bins, time, knowledge, and help from the state. Then give clear results, such as more land waste, air and water harm, and health problems.
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Keep the focus on the question. The part about Japan is useful, but it is too long because it does not clearly explain why people fail to recycle or what happens next. Use this space to develop your main reasons and results.
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Explain each idea with one clear link. For example: if people have no separate collection near their homes, they are less likely to recycle; this means more waste goes to land sites.
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The Bangladesh example is relevant and helps your answer. Make it clearer by saying that people may want to recycle, but they cannot do so when there is no separate waste collection.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction; reasons; results; conclusion. Your essay mostly follows this plan, but the Japan paragraph breaks the flow.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with a clear main sentence. For example: “One main reason is that recycling is not easy for many people.” Then add one or two explanations and an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. Words such as “However”, “For example”, “As a result”, and “In addition” are helpful, but do not put too many ideas in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make sentences shorter and clearer. Some sentences are hard to follow because they have many ideas and missing words. Read each sentence and check: who does what, and why?
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present. Improve the conclusion by restating the main reasons and results in a clear way, without adding new ideas.
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You discuss both why recycling is low and the possible bad results for people and nature.
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The Bangladesh example is specific and supports your point about poor waste services.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs, and the ideas move from reasons to results.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful linking words such as “For example”, “Furthermore”, and “In conclusion”.
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