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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) from technology and
service
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 sectors in the United Kingdom between 1992 and 2000. The unit is shown in percentage.
Overall
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, the digital
industry
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 had a significant effect on economic growth. The IT company had the highest rank in 2000,
while
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 the
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service based
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service-based
 sectors showed the lowest in 1992.
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, we can see that the
service
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industry
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 has gradually increased. The IT
industry
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 had
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 similar trend,
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 it declined marginally in 1996. In the technology
industry
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, the percentage generally rose from 1992 to 1994.
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, the trend edged down by approximately 0.2 units
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 before it grew sharply until 2000. The IT
industry
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 peaked in 2000 by 15% and had the highest GDP over the years.
On the other hand
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, the
service
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industry
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 rose stabily in 1992 to 2000. We can see the upward trend
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 the chart.
This
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industry
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 started
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 by 4% and reached its peak in 2000 at around 8.2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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