Some people think that it is good fir a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
The foreign movies like
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Harry Potter
and
marvel
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are
undieniably
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undeniably
attractive and well-known in the world, which may provide
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experience to
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the audience
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.
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, the
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Kong
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local
movie
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incorporate
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numerous people's
memeroies
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memories
and local
culture
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,
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Kong
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movie
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is more important
rather
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than foreign
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movie
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movies
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.
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, it is better to produce these locally.
Body paragraph 1
At first , promoting
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Kong
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local
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movie
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movies
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can support
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Hong
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the Hong
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Kong
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film
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industry and preserve
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Kong
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local
culture
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.It is
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to see that there are
numerious
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numerous
local movies with low box office , leading to the invesment for
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Kong
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decreasing .
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, local
films
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are difficult to preserve.
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, if citizens give more support and the
country
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country's
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culture
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promoting
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local
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movie
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movies
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,
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box office will defineitly growth and increase.
That the
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Hong
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Kong
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film
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industry may have
larger
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a larger
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income and money for investing
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movie
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, preserving and supporting
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Kong
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film
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In addition
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Kong
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local
culture
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can be
preserve
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This
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is mainly because local
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invlove and incorporate in local
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movie
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movies
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In particular
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hong
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kong
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culture
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will become strange to
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generation
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, and local
movie
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is one way to share and promote
to
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them .
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, local
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movie
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movies
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play a significant role in promoting local
culture
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Second ,
produce
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producing
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Hong
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Kong
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film
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films
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locally
are
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building up and creating
the
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memories
of
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new
generation
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in the future . In the past, the
films
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act
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by
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are undeniably well
know
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and
be
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the unreplaceable role in each
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Y's mind .
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, a local
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in the past will become
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important memory
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each
citizen
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heart .
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, produce local
movie
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may creating the important
memeries
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memories
for
new
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generation
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Also
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, local
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record down local environment
in
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that time. If the times
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and people look back , they may feel a sense of belonging.
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, local
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may bring
sense
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a sense
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of belonging to people in the
futher
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future
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, producing local
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are
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important.
Conclusion
In conclusion, producing local
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can enhance
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kong
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movie
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industry ,preserving
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hong
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kong
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culture
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and creating
memeries
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memories
for
new
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the new
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generation
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.

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task response
You give a clear view that local films are more important. However, the question asks you to discuss both views. Add one full body part about why foreign films and TV shows can be good, such as giving people new ideas, high-quality shows, and a way to learn about other places. Then explain why you still prefer local work.
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Make your main ideas more fully clear. Your points about jobs, local culture, memory, and a sense of belonging are useful, but some parts repeat the same idea. Explain each point with a simple reason and one clear example.
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Use examples that fit all of the topic. Harry Potter, Marvel, and Stephen Chow films are good examples, but say clearly how each example supports your point about imported or local movies and TV programmes.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending. To improve the flow, use one main idea in each part. For example: first, local films help culture; second, they help the local film business; then discuss foreign films in another part.
coherence and cohesion
Some links are used too many times, especially “Thus”. Use a wider set of simple links, such as “For example”, “Also”, “However”, “As a result”, and “In the end”.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between sentences clearer. For example, instead of “That the Hong Kong film industry may have larger income”, write “As a result, the Hong Kong film industry may earn more money to make new films.”
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same words for key ideas. Choose “local films” or “Hong Kong films” and use it most of the time. This will make the writing easier to follow.
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Your opinion is clear from the start and stays the same to the end: you believe local films should be made and supported.
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You use relevant local examples, including Hong Kong films and Stephen Chow. These make your ideas more real.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear basic shape: an introduction, two main parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You often show cause and result, such as support for local films leading to more money for the film business.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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