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Some people believe that university education should be free for all students, regardless of their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In some
countries
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,
university
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education
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 is free for all
students
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, whether they can afford the
fees
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 or not. I partly agree that
university
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education
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 should be free for everyone in
countries
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 that can afford it, but in poorer
countries
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, I think
students
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’ financial backgrounds must be considered.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, wealthy
countries
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 have a lot of
resources
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 and
money
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, so they can easily afford free
education
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 for all
students
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 without affecting public services.
This
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 will reduce the financial pressure on many families.
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, many
students
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 from families that cannot afford tuition
fees
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 will be able to enter
university
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 without worrying about the
fees
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.
Furthermore
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, the
money
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 that was supposed to be spent on
university
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fees
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 can be spent in different ways that will benefit the family and the economy.
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,
instead
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 of spending 100,000 dollars or even more on tuition
fees
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,
this
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money
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 can be used to open a business.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, poorer
countries
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 do not have enough
money
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 and
resources
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 to afford free
education
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 for all
students
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 without affecting the government budget. In my opinion,
education
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 should be free for those who cannot afford it, but other
students
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 should pay the
fees
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, even if
this
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 puts financial pressure on their families.
This
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 is because the government has limited
resources
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, so these
resources
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 must be spent on important things.
For example
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, the
money
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 and
resources
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 can be spent on public services that benefit the whole society. They can
also
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 be spent on projects that support the economy, which is better than spending them on
students
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 who can afford the
fees
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I partly agree that
university
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education
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 should be free for all
students
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 if it does not affect public services and the government budget.
However
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, if it does, I think support must be specifically provided to those who really need it.

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task response
Your view is clear: free study is a good idea in rich countries, while poor countries should help students who need it most. To make the answer stronger, explain more clearly why all students should get free study in rich countries, even students from rich homes.
task response
Your main ideas are on topic and are explained well. Add one more clear reason or a more real example. For example, say how free study can give a country more doctors, teachers, or other skilled workers.
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The example of using fee money to start a business is useful, but it may not fit every student or family. Make it more careful by saying that some families may use saved money for a home, health care, or a small business.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: your view, the case for rich countries, the case for poor countries, and a short end. Keep this strong plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words well, but do not start too many sentences with words like “Also”, “Furthermore”, and “For example”. Join some short ideas so the writing feels more natural.
coherence and cohesion
In the second main part, make the link between limited public money and paid fees even clearer. You could state that if rich students pay, the state can use more money to help poor students and key public needs.
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You answer the full question and give a clear partly agree view from the first paragraph to the end.
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Your ideas are fair and balanced. You look at both rich and poor countries instead of giving only one side.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear focus, and the last paragraph restates your view well.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Firstly”, “On the other hand”, and “In conclusion” help the reader follow your ideas easily.
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