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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.
The bar chart illustrates the
salary
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 at the beginning and after
three
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years
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 of working in five spheres in the United Kingdom , and the table demonstrates how many
hours
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 per week people
work
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 there.
Overall
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, underground drivers earn the most at the beginning and after
three
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years
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 period, despite the fact that they spend the least amount of time at
work
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 per week among the five,
while
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 nurses'
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salary is
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salaries are
 the smallest one in the first
three
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years
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 at
work
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. The
salary
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 of the police workers starts at about 22000 pounds and remains almost the same in the described time range, and nurses start at about 17000 with an increase of 1000 after
three
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years
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. Teachers are in the middle among five, with an entry
salary
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 of about 32000 and an increase
by
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of about
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 2000 in
three
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years
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,
while
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 firefighters and underground drivers earn about 40000 and 50000 , respectively. The average working
hours
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 per week fluctuate from 36 for underground drivers to 55 for teachers and firefighters. Nurses
work
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 about 38
hours
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,
while
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 police workers spend 40
hours
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 in their workplace.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, three, years, hours, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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