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The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

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The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The maps illustrate the
changes
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 that took place in the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
This
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 report aims to summarise the key trends, significant comparisons and notable
changes
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 highlighted in the data.
Overall
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, the
area
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 underwent several significant
changes
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. Some existing features were removed or replaced,
while
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 some
facilites
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facilities
 were added.
In addition
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, the layout of the
area
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 was more modern. Looking first at the northern part of the
area
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, the public car park was added next to the city hospital. The bus stop was converted into
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. Another notable trend is that the ring road
was
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remained in the same location,
although
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bus
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the bus
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 station was built next to
hospital Rd
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Hospital Road
. Moving to the opposite part of the
area
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, the car park for staff and
public
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the public
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 was converted to
staff
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a staff
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 car park. Meanwhile, the hospital Rd was remained in the same location.
Overall
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, these
changes
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 made the
area
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 more developed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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