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The following plans show recent archaeological findings at a historic site in the year 2004 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The two maps illustrate how the archaeological findings at an ancient coastal site changed between 2004 and 2014.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagrams that the number of discoveries rose dramatically over the period, with several major buildings unearthed and the total of dwellings almost tripling,
whereas
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 the woodland covering the western half was largely cleared to make way for the excavations.
Body paragraph 2
The first map reveals that, in 2004, dense trees occupied the entire left-hand side of the area,
while
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 mountains lay in the north-east. Only three old houses were visible, one situated directly below the hills and a pair
further
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 east, and a temple stood in the south-eastern corner beside the sea, so the majority of the land remained unexplored.
Conclusion
The
later
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latter
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 plan shows that, by 2014, the picture was significantly different. A stadium was located in the north-west, where the forest once grew, and just a couple of trees survived in the south-west.
Furthermore
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, a toilet block appeared in the north, and a palace emerged in the south, directly west of the temple, which was retained unchanged.
Moreover
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, the housing finds increased to nine, arranged in a double row along the eastern edge, roughly triple the earlier figure.
Consequently
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, if digging continued at
this
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 rate, the whole settlement would be exposed within another ten years.

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task response
Remove the last sentence about what may happen in the next ten years. The maps do not show this, so it is not needed. Keep the report only on what can be seen in 2004 and 2014.
task response
Be careful with words such as “old houses” and “a couple of trees survived” unless the map clearly gives this information. Use simple map words such as “houses”, “trees”, “to the west”, and “in the north”.
coherence and cohesion
Your four-paragraph plan is clear. To make the link even smoother, group all changes in the west together and all new buildings in the east and south together.
coherence and cohesion
Do not use too many linking words in one paragraph. Words like “Furthermore” and “Moreover” are useful, but short clear sentences can make the map changes easier to follow.
task response
You give a clear overview of the main changes: more finds, new large buildings, more houses, and less woodland.
task response
You report key places well, including the stadium in the north-west, the palace near the temple, and the row of houses on the east side.
coherence and cohesion
The report has a clear order: introduction, overview, 2004 details, then 2014 details. This makes it easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Place language is used well, such as “north-east”, “south-eastern corner”, “directly west of”, and “along the eastern edge”.
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