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You want to learn a foreign language to help you in your work. A teacher near where you live is offering lessons in this language. Write a letter to this teacher. In your letter  Say how you heard about the language lessons  Explain how learning this language will help you in your work  Ask some questions about the lessons

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Dear Mrs. Tran I’m writing
this
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 letter to apply for a
language
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 course. I am preparing to find a job , and I want to get a well-paid job.
Besides
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 that, I
also
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 wish to have opportunities to develop any professional growth.
While
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 I was searching, I heard about your
language
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 lessons from my friends , and people learned with you.
According to
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 them, your
language
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 lessons are very useful , and you are a very kind teacher. What is more, I am
also
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 living near you, I go to your class maybe around 15 minutes , and I have decided to apply for your
English
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 course. I find that, today ,
English
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 is an international
language
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 and it is considered a second
language
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 after one’s native
language
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. If I have good knowledge of
English
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, I will apply for a job at a foreign company.
English
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 will help me communicate better with foreigners regarding work-related matters , and I can do work more easily. I have some questions about the lessons. First of all, what is the tuition for a course? And how many people are there in the class?
Second,
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what is your class schedule like?
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, do you offer tutoring for beginners? I am looking forward to learning from you soon. Thank you very much! Sincerely Mr. Thach

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task response
Answer each point in a more direct way. Say the language name, how it will help in one job, and ask clear questions about days, times, cost, and class size.
task response
Use a more formal tone. Write “I would like to join your course” instead of “I want to get a well-paid job.”
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph: why you write, how English helps at work, and your questions.
coherence and cohesion
Make some long sentences shorter. This will make your letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care, such as “First,” “Also,” and “Finally.” Do not join many ideas with commas.
task response
You cover all the main points: how you heard about the lessons, why the language is useful for work, and questions about the class.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, a main part, and a polite end. The questions are easy to find.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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