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The table below show the results of surveys in 2000 2005 and 2010 about on e uiversity

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The table below show the results of surveys in 2000 2005 and 2010 about on e uiversity
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 the results of surveys in different years 2000,2005 and
2010
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 about one university.
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, the highest rate was the print
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 in
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while
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 it was
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 to electronic
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 and print
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 in 2010. In 2000, teachings quality rating was around 65
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while
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 it
rised
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 in
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 63 and 69
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. Electronic
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 rating showed 88
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 in 2010 before reaching the lowest point in
2000
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2000,
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 around 45
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per cent, while
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increased around
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 72
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 2005. Buildings/ teaching facilities maintained the steady levels of percentage in 2000,2005 and 2010 around 77. In 2000,
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 of modules offered was around 32
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while
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 it decreased in 2005 around 30
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in 2010 around 27.Print
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 rating reached its peak percentage
about
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of about
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 89 in 2005 before reaching about 84 in 2000. In 2010, it decreased slightly
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 88.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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