A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

Animals
are an integral part of
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the
an

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cosystem.It has become a debatable issue regarding the exploitation of
animalsby
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animals by
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mankind.Some people opine that
animals
should be treated the same way as
humans
are and have equal rights as
humans
while others think that they should be used as a source of food or medical
research
.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument. With regard to
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xploitation of
animals
,people believe that it is acceptable for several
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,
humans
are considered to be the most prime being on
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lanet and everything is done to ensure human survival.If it means experimentation on
animals
to fight and find
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a

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ure against disease or to
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other demands.
Then
this
takes priority over animal suffering.
Furthermore
,it is believed by some that
animals
do not feel pain or loss the same way as
humans
do,so if they have to be killed for medical
research
and
other purpose
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another purpose
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,
then
it is morally acceptable.
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,
i
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do not believe that these
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stand up to scrutiny.
To begin
with,it has been shown on several occasions by secret filming in laboratories by animal rights groups that animal feel as much pain as
humans
do and they
also
suffer if kept for long periods in cages.
In addition
,a substantial amount of
research
has been done on
animals
for cosmetic products,not for finding cures which
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unnecessary.
Moreover
,
humans
can get all the required nutrients
f
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orm green vegetables and fruits.
Therefore
again,having to kill
animals
for food is not
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dequate argument. Summing up,it can not be denied that
animals
are required for
research
and other purposes but it should
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in mind that they should not be capitalized on just for the sake of human needs and appropriate steps must be taken to improve the rights of
animals
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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