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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

#people #animals #rights #humans #food #research
Animals
 are an integral part of
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cosystem.It has become a debatable issue regarding the exploitation of
animalsby
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animals by
animals
 mankind.Some people opine that
animals
 should be treated the same way as
humans
 are and have equal rights as
humans
 while others think that they should be used as a source of food or medical
research
.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument. With regard to
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xploitation of
animals
,people believe that it is acceptable for several
reasonsFirstly
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reasons firstly
,
humans
 are considered to be the most prime being on
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lanet and everything is done to ensure human survival.If it means experimentation on
animals
 to fight and find
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ure against disease or to
fulfill
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 other demands.
Then
this
 takes priority over animal suffering.
Furthermore
,it is believed by some that
animals
 do not feel pain or loss the same way as
humans
 do,so if they have to be killed for medical
research
 and
other purpose
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,
then
 it is morally acceptable.
However
,
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 do not believe that these
argument
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 stand up to scrutiny.
To begin
 with,it has been shown on several occasions by secret filming in laboratories by animal rights groups that animal feel as much pain as
humans
 do and they
also
 suffer if kept for long periods in cages.
In addition
,a substantial amount of
research
 has been done on
animals
 for cosmetic products,not for finding cures which
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 unnecessary.
Moreover
,
humans
 can get all the required nutrients
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orm green vegetables and fruits.
Therefore
 again,having to kill
animals
 for food is not
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dequate argument. Summing up,it can not be denied that
animals
 are required for
research
 and other purposes but it should
be keep
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 in mind that they should not be capitalized on just for the sake of human needs and appropriate steps must be taken to improve the rights of
animals
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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