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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience

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Nowadays poor
nations
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 need
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upport of the
well developed
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countries
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,
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 so that
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overnment of poor
countries
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 can provide all the basic necessities of the lives to their citizens. In poor
countries
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the most basic issues are poverty, nutrition, uneducated people, unemployment and commerce. I totally in
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 of
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 topic and will share my views about it. Richest
countries
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 are strong enough to provide the basic
facilities
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 to the poor
nations
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.
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, Africa is one of the developing
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country
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, the people of that
country
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 don’t have proper health
facilities
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, employment and trade. The government of that
country
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 seek help from
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ichest
country
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 and due to
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 that nation has improved now.
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, there
is
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 not good health
facilities
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 are available, unemployment and poverty
is
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 even present but it has been changed a lot if we compare it with
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ast.
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, richest
countries
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 provide loans to
that
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those
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 poor
countries
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 if needed; so the government can plan new strategies
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how to improve their
country
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’s economy.
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, it is very important for a
country
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 who borrow a sum of money from
a
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 richest
countries
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 they should have to return it on time because
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 they will gain trust from them and if any problem will initiate they will be always there to help. In my opinion, if
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ichest
countries
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 are providing support to the poor
nations
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,
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 it is a very big opportunity for
that
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those
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nations
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 to improve their economy and provide better
facilities
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 to their citizens
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