Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us. New
inventions
make the
lives
of
the
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people
easier. On
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ther hand
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doctors
are really important persons for us.
Doctors
are the person who
help
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us to get well when we become sick. They save our
lives
. In my opinion,
inventions
and
doctors
are incomparable both have different roles in our
lives
.
Lots
of
inventions
have become
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ery important part of our
lives
.
For example
,
aero planes
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by which we can travel and reach to other countries earlier as compare to
another
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means of transportation. Computers
which
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are the most amazing invention. We are totally now become dependent on computers, it has
lots
of benefits and is useful in many ways. In offices, shopping malls, schools and homes,
people
use computers to save
lots
of data, documents, calculations and doing assignments.
Furthermore
,
smart phones
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are
also
one of the most important
inventions
for peoples.
People
found it more convenient for them in carrying as well as
lots
of applications are available due to which they can contact
with
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their family, relatives and friends.
Moreover
, there are
lots
of things that are invented by inventors that had made
house work
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also
easy
for example
, home appliances, washing machines, refrigerators etc. On
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ther hand
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doctors
are most knowledgeable persons that can treat different diseases.
Doctors
study a lot and always want to get rid of illness from a patient. If there will be no
doctors
then
nobody can protect the sick
people
and
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ortality rate increase extremely. There are
lots
of procedures
also
done to protect
the
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lives
.
Doctors
perform different screening and diagnose
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isease properly. In conclusion, both have different roles and values in our
lives
, without doctor’s human beings cannot survive
healthy
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or we can say that no one can be there to protect from illnesses. Obviously, without inventors
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new
inventions
cannot take place and there would be no new unique discovery
people
would be able to see.
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