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Money should be spent on creating new buildings rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #buildings #ones
Nowadays
people
 are living in modern era and they want to live a luxurious life. Government of every
country
 want to make their
country
 beautiful, so after some period of time, some countries prefer to renovate old
buildings
 and some evacuate old building and built new modern
buildings
. I am agree with
this
 statement and will discuss my view: Most countries have
people
 those belong to different status, culture, traditions and languages but all
people
 have equal rights and they must have to live according to laws and regulations. Every person of the
country
 want live in a neat and clean environment and mostly
people
 prefer to live in a new
buildings
. New
buildings
 have lots of benefits like, new architecture, spacious rooms, centralized air conditioner or may be some didn’t have it and better drainage system.
People
 those who are living in old
buildings
 they have to suffer from many problems like, bad drainage system, small rooms, lack of cleanliness and house bugs. In some cases the structure of the old
buildings
 are in
such
 a bad condition that it can’t stand firmly and
such
 kind of
buildings
 are really dangerous for peoples. More over new
buildings
 would be attractive to many of the peoples. It
also
 attract the tourists because of unique architecture, it would be good for the economy of a
country
. Peoples are always attracted by natural beauty as well as good architecture. No doubt government have to spend doubled amount to build new
buildings
 but it would make the
country
 more modern. To sum up, for the growth of a
country
 economy it is better to build new
buildings
 as old building in the city centers would not work out to attract
people
 and
also
 dangerous if it is unstable.
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