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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Even in developed
countries
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a degree of
poverty
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 exists.
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, in many developing
countries
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poverty
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 is a major problem, and the number of poor
people
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 continues to increase. There are various factors that cause
poverty
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 and these need to be addressed.' The
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 factor influencing
world
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poverty
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 is the current global economic
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.
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system
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 reinforces inequality between rich and poor
people
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 since it allows resources to be distributed unequally amongst
people
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.
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, the global economic
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 can favour the investment strategies of large transna­tional corporations, which often pay their
workers
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 sub-standard wages. Another reason for
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poverty
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 is illiteracy. Many
people
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 around the
world
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 do not have access to
education
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, and
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do not learn to read or write. They are,
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, precluded from well-paid employment and so can not improve their living conditions. In order to provide help for the
world
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's poor these problems need to be addressed.
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, the interna­tional community has to establish a fairer economic
system
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 in which the wealth of each country can be shared equitably amongst its
people
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.
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, all
countries
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 around the
world
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 should make it a priority to eradicate illiteracy by providing
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omprehensive
education
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 for all citizens so that everyone is equally capable of improving their living standards via access to
education
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. To conclude, it can be said that
poverty
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 will probably always exist.
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,
countries
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 around the
world
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 can take actions to reduce
poverty
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 by ensuring that there is a fair distribution of wealth amongst
people
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, and by making sure that all
people
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 have access to
education
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.
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