Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Even in developed
countries
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a degree of
poverty
exists.
However
, in many developing
countries
poverty
is a major problem, and the number of poor
people
continues to increase. There are various factors that cause
poverty
and these need to be addressed.' The
first
factor influencing
world
poverty
is the current global economic
system
.
This
system
reinforces inequality between rich and poor
people
since it allows resources to be distributed unequally amongst
people
.
In addition
, the global economic
system
can favour the investment strategies of large transna­tional corporations, which often pay their
workers
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sub-standard wages. Another reason for
world
poverty
is illiteracy. Many
people
around the
world
do not have access to
education
, and
as a result
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do not learn to read or write. They are,
therefore
, precluded from well-paid employment and so can not improve their living conditions. In order to provide help for the
world
's poor these problems need to be addressed.
Firstly
, the interna­tional community has to establish a fairer economic
system
in which the wealth of each country can be shared equitably amongst its
people
.
Moreover
, all
countries
around the
world
should make it a priority to eradicate illiteracy by providing
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omprehensive
education
for all citizens so that everyone is equally capable of improving their living standards via access to
education
. To conclude, it can be said that
poverty
will probably always exist.
Nevertheless
,
countries
around the
world
can take actions to reduce
poverty
by ensuring that there is a fair distribution of wealth amongst
people
, and by making sure that all
people
have access to
education
.

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