It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving money more important than spending in today’s world? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Saving
money
or spending
money
in
this
current
economical
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economic

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climate poses a dividing question. In
this
essay, I agree that in
this
modern world it is important to save
money
for
n
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a
the

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umber of reasons, namely for emergency funds and
to
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too

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many it’s a privilege
to
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of

It appears that the preposition to may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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spending
money
. On the one hand, spending
money
in various ways,
such
as going on vacations and shopping gives
people
a certain rush of happiness
that is
very much needed today.
People
are overworked, exhausted and unhappy;
thus
, focusing on saving
money
would rob them of a better tomorrow.
Moreover
, sometimes saving
money
is not always a choice one has
a
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apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun control in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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control over,
such
as buying food, investing in housing and spending
money
on transportation, these are all items and situations where
m
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the

The noun phrase money seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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oney is needed to be spent and it does not allow room for one to save
money
as the remaining amount from their salary might not be great.
On the other hand
, live altering situations call for a need to save
money
. In certain places, like the United States of America where healthcare is priced like a luxury, it is very crucial for
people
to save
money
in order to afford taking care of their health and
paying
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to pay

The verb afford is usually followed by the to-infinitive, not by a gerund. Change paying to the to-infinitive form.

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for their prescriptions.
Conversely
, as I have mentioned above,
c
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the

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ost of living has increased significantly and reached a point where
people
are unable to afford
housing
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to house

The verb afford is usually followed by the to-infinitive, not by a gerund. Change housing to the to-infinitive form.

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and buying a car.
Therefore
, it is important to have enough
money
saved to survive in today’s world and to prevent economic anxiety.
In addition
, a vast majority of today’s
people
are either in the working class or financially underprivileged;
thus
, spending
money
is not an option for them and saving
money
is defiantly on the top of their priority list. Overall, based on the majority of
people
’s economic standing, saving
money
is very crucial to
ones
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one's

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survival and is a priority, as
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,

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without it, it would lead
people
to turn to loans from banks with high interest or even being on the verge of bankruptcy. I agree that it’s key to save
money
rather than to spend it in
this
modern world.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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