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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving money more important than spending in today’s world? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own experience.

Saving
money
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 or spending
money
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 in
this
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 current
economical
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 climate poses a dividing question. In
this
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 essay, I agree that in
this
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 modern world it is important to save
money
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 for
n
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a
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umber of reasons, namely for emergency funds and
to
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 many it’s a privilege
to
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 spending
money
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. On the one hand, spending
money
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 in various ways,
such
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 as going on vacations and shopping gives
people
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 a certain rush of happiness
that is
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 very much needed today.
People
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 are overworked, exhausted and unhappy;
thus
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, focusing on saving
money
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 would rob them of a better tomorrow.
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, sometimes saving
money
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 is not always a choice one has
a
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control over,
such
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 as buying food, investing in housing and spending
money
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 on transportation, these are all items and situations where
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m
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oney is needed to be spent and it does not allow room for one to save
money
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 as the remaining amount from their salary might not be great.
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, live altering situations call for a need to save
money
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. In certain places, like the United States of America where healthcare is priced like a luxury, it is very crucial for
people
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 to save
money
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 in order to afford taking care of their health and
paying
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 for their prescriptions.
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, as I have mentioned above,
c
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ost of living has increased significantly and reached a point where
people
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 are unable to afford
housing
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 and buying a car.
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, it is important to have enough
money
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 saved to survive in today’s world and to prevent economic anxiety.
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, a vast majority of today’s
people
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 are either in the working class or financially underprivileged;
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, spending
money
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 is not an option for them and saving
money
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 is defiantly on the top of their priority list. Overall, based on the majority of
people
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’s economic standing, saving
money
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 is very crucial to
ones
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 survival and is a priority, as
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,
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without it, it would lead
people
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 to turn to loans from banks with high interest or even being on the verge of bankruptcy. I agree that it’s key to save
money
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 rather than to spend it in
this
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 modern world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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