Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

People
believe that the expenditure of
art
by
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the

The noun phrase government seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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g
overnment is unnecessary and some other sector deserves
this
money more. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
statement.
Firstly
, are is a form which represents culture, human emotion and largely, humanity. From stoneage,
people
are engaging themselves on
art
. It does not only give
people
visual pleasure but
also
gives their heart peace. Many
people
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claim

The singular verb claims does not appear to agree with the plural subject people. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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claims
that they managed inspiration or reason
Suggestion
for

It appears that the preposition of may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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of
living even the meaning of life through
art
.
On the other hand
, some
people
may think that
art
has no productivity so that the money should be invested
Suggestion
in

It appears that the preposition on may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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on
some industries or factories.
However
, a good painting may not help a nation economically much, but it can make us feel human. To give a clear example, a painting on poor
people
can melt
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our

It appears that out is not correct in this context. Consider changing it.

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out
heart and inspire us to help them.
This
type of emotions are created by
art
and these emotions
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represent

The singular verb represents does not appear to agree with the plural subject emotions. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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represents
humanity. In my opinion,
Suggestion
the

The noun phrase government seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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g
overnment should
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spend

The verb spent after the modal verb should does not appear to be in the correct form. Consider changing the verb form.

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spent
money on
art
as much as required. Despite
Suggestion
apply

The preposition of after Despite may be unecessary. Consider removing the second preposition.

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of
having a practical life, dealing with materialistic staff,
people
have to go back to the fundamental reason
Suggestion
for

It appears that the preposition of may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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of
living which is happiness. So, if
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the

It appears that an article is missing before the word government. Consider adding the article.

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g
overnment stop funding on
art
, many
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artists

The singular countable noun artist follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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artist
would be forced to stop painting and
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the

It appears that an article is missing before the word nation. Consider adding the article.

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n
ation would lose many talents and inspirational paintings. In conclusion, I would recommend the expenditure on
art
as necessary.
In addition
,
this
expenditure is not any sense of wastage,
this
is necessary for humankind.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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