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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the Internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office every day. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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contemporary technology. That significant advance has fomented to an intense discussion, which advocates its pros and divulges its cons.
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ogical conclusion. Perhaps the only acknowledged drawback is that
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 trend may impinge directly on professional responsibility. In the big picture, people tend to behave desultorily, if they do not be under managers’ pressure.
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, watching TV or entertainment can appeal to them and they will not be able to accomplish their given tasks on
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, which possesses a negative impact upon flourishing of the organization. From another
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ouple of benefits can be availed
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people.
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llocation of
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quander their
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 on commuting to
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 and that saved extra
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 behalf of workers, as well, which possess
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umulative effect on the people’s budget. To illustrate that,
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aily routine of worker can be a perfect example, it
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 early mornings and long-term commuting to
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prevalence merit for the workforces in goliaths,
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 because of its positive influence on workers’ productivity, as well. To elucidate more lucidly
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ense of satisfaction, are inclined to
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 if they had nothing to be anxious,
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 they can concentrate well.
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, the genuine recipient from that incentive is likely the organization of that staffs. To finish up, after careful consideration of both
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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