Modern technology, such as personal computers and the Internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office every day. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

In our rapidly developing milieu, workers have merited access to
work
at home through
the
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contemporary technology. That significant advance has fomented to an intense discussion, which advocates its pros and divulges its cons.
This
essay will highlight both sides and draw
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ogical conclusion. Perhaps the only acknowledged drawback is that
,
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this
trend may impinge directly on professional responsibility. In the big picture, people tend to behave desultorily, if they do not be under managers’ pressure.
For instance
, watching TV or entertainment can appeal to them and they will not be able to accomplish their given tasks on
time
, which possesses a negative impact upon flourishing of the organization. From another
prospective
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, thereby
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ouple of benefits can be availed
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people.
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,
this
facilitation could be
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id in
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llocation of
time
of staff via not to allow them
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quander their
time
on commuting to
work
and that saved extra
time
can be invested in other crucial affairs.
Furthermore
, fares can be saved
in
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behalf of workers, as well, which possess
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umulative effect on the people’s budget. To illustrate that,
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aily routine of worker can be a perfect example, it
comprise
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early mornings and long-term commuting to
work
and
this
is not convenient for human beings, that problems,
however
, can be easily addressed through
this
approach.
Secondly
,
this
is
a
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prevalence merit for the workforces in goliaths,
such
as Apple or Google, not only because of its compactness but
also
because of its positive influence on workers’ productivity, as well. To elucidate more lucidly
this
can be said that, people, who have
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ense of satisfaction, are inclined to
work
with more effort and zero in on their
work
. It is could be by the virtue of that
,
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if they had nothing to be anxious,
then
they can concentrate well.
Therefore
, the genuine recipient from that incentive is likely the organization of that staffs. To finish up, after careful consideration of both
of
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sides,
this
situation can be contemplated as a positive or negative advance according to point of view persona.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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