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this
21st century, companies are giving more importance to human power compared to
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old age. The owner of the
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is now aware that to
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their business and keep running
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usiness smoothly, skilled people are the
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need with
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ong term commitment. To
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this
, nowadays, companies are offering a number of
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to their employees
such
as paid leaves in the pregnancy emergency. I honestly feel
this
is the best way to encourage lady skilled workers to
work
for any
organization
. At cons side, while working in the pregnancy
time
, the employee can not perform well compared to the normal days. During the maternity, girls are facing more physical pain and they require to be more
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about their child at the
time
of handling
work
pressure which will result
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ow performance of
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, in many countries, now, it is a law to provide maternity leave to girls and can not ask to leave the job in
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particular days. In
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situation, to fill the human power needs companies are now hiring employees on the contract basis which causes extra financial loss to the
organization
. While
at
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another side, There are several
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to the company, staff and to the society itself. If the
organization
thinks about workers and provide them
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help in the form of leaves,
then
workers will
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increase their dedication towards
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ompany and continuing their service to the firm for
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to the company as they do not need to more worried about
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iring process. The organisation can save their
time
and hiring resources. To conclude
this
, it is firmly clear that to grow business one needs skill candidates who can
work
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and effectively. The
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leaves and other necessary
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are
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to have
this
type of highly skilled people on the board.
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