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What are the advantages of maternity leave? Which side for you feel outweighs the other.

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old age. The owner of the
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 is now aware that to
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usiness smoothly, skilled people are the
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 need with
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ong term commitment. To
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conquer
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, nowadays, companies are offering a number of
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benefits
 to their employees
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 as paid leaves in the pregnancy emergency. I honestly feel
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 is the best way to encourage lady skilled workers to
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 for any
organization
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. At cons side, while working in the pregnancy
time
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, the employee can not perform well compared to the normal days. During the maternity, girls are facing more physical pain and they require to be more
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conscious
 about their child at the
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 of handling
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 pressure which will result
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ow performance of
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, in many countries, now, it is a law to provide maternity leave to girls and can not ask to leave the job in
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 particular days. In
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 situation, to fill the human power needs companies are now hiring employees on the contract basis which causes extra financial loss to the
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. While
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another side, There are several
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benefits
 to the company, staff and to the society itself. If the
organization
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 thinks about workers and provide them
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necessary
 help in the form of leaves,
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 workers will
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definitely
 increase their dedication towards
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ompany and continuing their service to the firm for
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ong
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. Long term commitment of employees is a great
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beneficial
 to the company as they do not need to more worried about
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iring process. The organisation can save their
time
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 and hiring resources. To conclude
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, it is firmly clear that to grow business one needs skill candidates who can
work
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 and effectively. The
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maternity
 leaves and other necessary
benifits
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benefits
 are
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ey
requirement
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 to have
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 type of highly skilled people on the board.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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