Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples.

In recent times,
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injuries and mortalities have sparked heated debates about whether it is healthy for
children
to be around
pets
. In
this
essay
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I shall argue that
such
dangers are overemphasised and that
children
receive substantive psychological benefits through having
pets
.
To begin
with,
although
exotic
pets
(e.g. snakes, spiders, apes, etc.) have been known to occasionally hurt and even kill
children
,
such
incidents are so statistically rare as to be negligible.
This
is because the overwhelming majority of
children
have non-lethal cats, dogs, fish, rodents and rabbits for
pets
.
For example
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The Child Safety Institute found that over 90% of
children
owned the aforementioned
pets
, and professed that they had never felt in the least bit endangered by them. Seen in
this
light, it is clearly unfounded to claim that
pets
present any physical danger to
children
.
Secondly
,
pets
can impact positively upon child psychology.
This
is because young pet owners frequently empathise with their
pets
and perform a diverse range of actions to maintain
their
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well being (e.g. feeding, grooming, administering medicine, etc).
For example
, the Cambridge Developmental Psychology Unit found that
children
who had grown up with
pets
were 30% less likely to bully others and resolve conflicts through aggression.
Consequently
, it is undeniable that a child’s pro-sociality and mental health can be improved through exposure to
pets
. In conclusion, the cited evidence provides strong support for the view that
children
owning
pets
is a good thing. In the future, as more laws are introduced to ban the ownership of illegally acquired exotic
pets
,
this
viewpoint will no doubt surge in popularity.

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