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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In recent years,
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 the availability of improved transportation,
people
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 often migrate from rural
areas
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 to urban
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as a result
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 the population in the village is declining.In my opinion,
people
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 moving to the
cities
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 have more negative improvement than positive development. One of the main reasons that
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 move from villages to
cities
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 is to find better job opportunities,
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 is mainly because of the income that they get.
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, a person in the village has less exposure to the extent of jobs available in the
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, they often work in farm fields doing jobs that involve high energy but less pay.
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, moving to
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 helps them find easier jobs for higher salaries.They
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 have other facilities like transportation and the availability of improved technologies.
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,
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 moving to
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 might create a detrimental effect on the villages’ economy
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 of fewer
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 available to work in the fields there will be a decline in agriculture.
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, there would be a significant decline in fresh produce
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 as fruits ,vegetables, rice and so on.
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 will create a major problem for both the city and the village.
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 can be avoided if the government introduced new schemes and paid higher for the farmers.
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,
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 will make fewer
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 leave the rural
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. In conclusion, there are more positives if
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 move to
cities
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 like greater job opportunities and improved facilities.It is very important to know about the consequences that
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 will face if they all leave agriculture and move to urban
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, so I strongly believe that
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 is more of a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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