Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion.

While some people believe that competitiveness should be instilled in the minds of the children in

school

, others

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team work

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and cooperation. In my opinion, the latter notion of imbibing

team

spirit is more essential. Whether or not a child at

school

succeeds in the field of academics, sports or co-curricular activities, there is

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strong sense of rivalry and competition which is inculcated right from the beginning of

school

life. While some argue that

this

is healthy and makes a student more confident, there are proponents who find

this

harmful . The

school

performance is gauged and compared, putting constant pressure in their young minds.

For instance

, a child who does fairly well in his music test, conducted at a private class, performs poorly at

school

while competing with his peers.

In contrast

, there are plenty of group and

team

activities arranged in schools which provide avenues to learn together and share ideas that are more impactful. Not only do the children learn group dynamics and work towards some common goals,

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they

also

create a niche for themselves. The

school

music bands,

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the members work in unison and have a winning ethos is to reckon with, siting as one of the best examples. The cleanliness drive initiatives taken up and sponsored by some of the schools , find a large number of students as volunteers who contribute in cleaning up of areas and public spaces

such

as beaches and in doing so learn civic manners and cooperation. To conclude,

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more important

that

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the

school

children are encouraged to develop a sound

team

spirit and ethics than putting them through a series of competitions.