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some people use the internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. is it a positive or negative development? give your own opinion and examples from your experience.

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Nowadays, the internet is one of the most useful invention for the individuals. Every person wants to become expert in using computers. Patients those who are suffering from any minor or major diseases take interest to study about its causes as well as interventions. In my opinion, it is an acceptable approach, to know about own
condition
, so that nobody will not take their disease
unserious
react verbally
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onerous
 and will follow proper treatment. In
society lots
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society, lots
 of people live together, if one person
have
Suggestion
has
 a proper education about one
condition
then
 it will become easier for him to help others. Lots of the minor medical issues can be treated at home by searching correct intervention for it.
Furthermore
, sometimes it
also
 happens lack of information is provided by the doctors,
may be
by chance
maybe
 it is due to the burden. Many of the clients feel unsatisfied after visiting a consultant due to incomplete explanation of particular
condition
. If the person study about their
health
 issues from the websites, it will become easier for a physician to explain a certain
health
condition
.
Moreover
, if there will be some queries related
health
 to discuss with physician it will become easy for patient to share. No doubt, there are lots of sites in which information is not shared by the
health
 professionals, it is dangerous for the human if they believe
on
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in
 it and apply that wrong treatment
on
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for
 themselves.
Besides
this
, it is the responsibility of the web to provide secure information, so that it will not be harmful. A knowledgeable society is very necessary for the awareness of many
health
 issues that can be spread in
community
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the community
communities
.
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