Most countries want to improve standard of living through economic development,however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

Many countries choose to perform economic development in order to improve living standard where
others believes
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others, believes
that can lead to the loss of social values. In my opinion, economic development as well as improved living standard has both advantages and disadvantages, but the advantages have upper hand on the drawbacks. The benefits of the economic developments are too many to count.
Firstly
, better standard of living gives better life. People will have more opportunity to think about noble issues when they don’t need to worry about their personal lifestyles consistently.
Secondly
, if the economy is developed, there would be less
crimes
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crime
. If everyone lives above the poverty lines, no one needs to steal or do other crimes to make their living which would result in decreased crime rates.
Finally
, people would give
effort
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the effort
to cultures, arts and other form of traditions and
extra curricular
outside the regular academic curriculum
extracurricular
activities as they would have enough resources. These will help the prosperity of humanity.
On the other hand
, better economy comes with better responsibility. Everybody may become busy with own lie that they ay skip socialization. That means less interaction with society which may result in losing of social values.
Additionally
, people may forget the necessity of the social institution and ignore
them which
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them, which
is
result
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the result
a result
of greater load of work. That can destroy these traditional
institutions
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institutions, hence
hence
, society. Another reason to worry about is the drug and alcohol problems. It is often seen that rich
families especially
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families, especially
their children engage themselves
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in
this
type of things. If
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it
becomes natural to every
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family, then
family then
then
destruction of society is not far enough.
Nevertheless
, these all problems can be solved by proper handling and sincere steps. In conclusion, economic development can have serious drawbacks, but with proper awareness, that drawbacks can be dealt and the benefits of the economic prosperity can be enjoyed by mankind.

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