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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Who does not like to spend
money
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? Now, people likely spending more
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money more
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money, more
 than
saving
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save
 it because they would like to enjoy their life or show off to their friends. It happens to most people and it is a negative development which affects a
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lot
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of
 their
future
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. Most people think that human just has one life and we only live once, so why don’t we enjoy it? With that point, people start to spend more and more until overspending. Salary is growing up now in most of the countries. Enhance, people are earning more and they want to show off their wealth. Sometimes, they just simply want to buy the item because it is trending. Sadly, it mostly happens to young people. Spending without thinking is a negative
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. Yes, you can say that you can earn more than you pay. Absolutely, it is not wrong.
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, have you ever thought about your
future
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? Job
is not going
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has not gone
 to stick with you forever and so does salary.
This
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 month, your bank account might have more than 4,000USD, but
next
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 month, who knows? Life not only has happiness, but
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 has unluckiness, which means the bad time could occur.
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, what if you have some bad news and your
money
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 already ran out? How to solve it? No one can stop you spending
money
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. I understand that we just live once and
yes we
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yes, we
 can enjoy and do anything we
want but
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want, but
 do not go
until
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by
to
 so far. In my opinion, spending without thinking and saving is a negative development. Honestly, I really hope that people will think carefully before they buy something. We all should have a
future
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 plan. Remember that living is not only for
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 moment, but
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 for the
future
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