It is believed that young people are more interested in international pop singers and movie stars than hisotry, historical events and historical people. Why is it so?

Modern era youngsters are passionate about singers and actors renowned worldwide rather than historical events or people.
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essay will discuss why the influence of modern artists is more on new generation than our history. The overwhelming lifestyle and fame gained by the celebrities over the short span of time has pulled the young audience towards them. Back in
history though
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history, though
people had done something great for their nation, they may not have earned great success, money and high standards of living which every youngster today dreams of.
For example
, there had been many events and people in our history, those were
recnogised
provided with a secure reputation
recognised
recognized
and known worldwide. These events did not upgraded the level of living and not build an
aura
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
area
for those people almost entire life.
This
very desire of living has led youth being motivated by artists.
In addition
to
this
, people think that it is
more easy
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easier
to adopt
celebrities lifestyle
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the celebrity lifestyle
celebrity lifestyle
a celebrity lifestyle
celebrity's lifestyle
and get noticed by everyone. Many musicians and movie stars are recognised only after their
first
performance and have got national awards for the same. The opposite was true in old era where many scientists did great inventions and many patriots passionately served the nation but rarely supported by
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
and mass audience. By the time their work was recognised and appreciated by the people and own country's
government they
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government, they
were very old or were dead.
Thus not
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Thus, not
being able to enjoy and live the dream success had let today's youth to follow the same footsteps to glory as the international actors do. At
last
,
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I
i would like to conclude that high standards of living and a strong zeal to be famous instantly has led young people to get influenced by the pop singers and movie stars
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