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Now a days food has become easier to prepare. Has this improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer with your own experience and examples?

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The advancement in
food
 technology has developed various methods which made cooking easy and convenient.
This
 essay will enlighten the benefits of how modern approach to cooking has added value to our lifestyle. The simplified methods of cooking
has helped
Suggestion
have helped
 all those who stay alone or live far away from their family. Many youngsters, especially males who work and live in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 city or town where they are self-dependent, the availability of canned
food stuff
(usually plural) consumer goods sold by a grocer
foodstuff
, precooked frozen
food
 items and bakery items make a lot of sense to satisfy their hunger. The two minutes cooking noodles and chicken nuggets are the best examples
of
Suggestion
Of
 easy cooking.
Thus it
Accept comma addition
Thus, it
 can be said that simplified cooking has definitely helped self-dependant people.
In addition
 to
this
, convenient cooking methods
has given
Suggestion
have given
had given
 us ample
time
 to get involved in other activities like family gatherings, fitness programs or focusing of career advancement. As in
early days
Suggestion
the early days
, the traditional cooking methods required a great deal of
time
 and even required to focus on same to prevent overcooking or undercooking. The
mordern
used of a living language; being the current stage in its development
Modern
modern
 cooking approach has eliminated
this
 additional
time
 loss to
great extent
Suggestion
a great extent
.
For example
, cooking in microwave oven just requires to set the timer without being worried
for
Suggestion
about
 how well
food
 will cook and it will automatically indicate once the
food
 is ready to eat and heated as desired.
This
 has saved ample
time
 which we can spend with family or friends at home or prepare for some activity important for career growth. Concluding my overall point of view
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 feel that revolution of modernization in
food
 industry and the way we cook has definitely helped and improved our lifestyle in a positive way.
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