Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tells us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

In today's world,
advertisement
has become a significant tool for marketing a
product
. While some argue that
advertisement
increases awareness about products that may improve our lives, others are of the opinion that
advertisement
induces people to buy unnecessary things. I strongly believe that the latter is more correct, as will be explained. To promote a
product
, companies generally propagate only its the brighter side,
thus
providing an incomplete picture of the
product
. When only positive aspects are known, there is an inclination to buy that
product
;
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;
thus
, we end up purchasing something which is not required. One
such
example is herbal
products and
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products, and
weight loss supplements. In data published by the magazine India Today, the use of herbal products to reduce weight has seen
significant increase
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a significant increase
significant increases
in the recent years, whereas health experts are of the opinion that weight can only be controlled through proper diet and exercise. Many of my friends who used
such
medicines have later repented their choice.
Moreover
, children are easily attracted by advertisements. Nowadays, most of the teenagers like to own a smart phone which is a result of mass
advertisement
. Recently a school in
UK
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the UK
banned children from using mobile phones inside school premises, as
cellphones
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cell phones
were the major cause of distraction which affected their studies. In conclusion, it can be said that an
advertisement
creates an impression on
consumer's mind
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the consumer's mind
and people end up buying an undesired
product
.
Thus
, a thorough research before buying is strongly recommended.
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  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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