Some people think that public health of a country can be improved if the government make laws regarding nutritious food but others think that it is the matter of personal choice and personal responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, healthcare condition is becoming more and more essential
to
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for
each individual. Some people argue that the
government
should take measures to improve
health
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the health
of their citizens by imposing
food
laws. Others believe that everyone has
responsible
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responsibility
for their own
health
.
This
essay will discuss both points of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, in
fact governments
Accept comma addition
fact, governments
play a critical role to ensure
well-being
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the well-being
of their citizens.
First
of all, governments are responsible for the quality and safety of
food
in the market, they could introduce strict laws to make sure that public
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
will not be damaged by polluted or expired
food
.
Moreover
, using unauthorized chemicals, selling
unhygienic
and low-quality
food
should be forbidden by the
government
.
For example
, eating fast
food
may lead to severe diseases
such
as
increase
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an increase
increases
in blood cholesterol, raise blood pressure and obesity. In some countries, the
government
imposes a
high
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higher
tax on junk
food
with the objective of discouraging its consumption. All of these are measures that can have a positive impact on public
health
.
On the other hand
, in my opinion healthy
lifestyle
is a choice and
habit
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a habit
of an individual, each person should hold accountable for their
health
, and the
government
cannot monitor the
lifestyle
of every citizen.
For instance
, if people follow a sedentary
lifestyle
such
as eating junk
food
, being a potato couch, being ignorant to break their bad habit and so on, they will surely suffer from physical
health
issues.
However
, the
government
cannot do much to help these people.
Furthermore
, the choices of individuals greatly affect the overall
health
condition of a nation.
Thus
, each person should choose more suitable
food
according to their own physical conditions, and retain a kind of good eating habit for
long term
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the long term
so as to have a healthier
lifestyle
. In
shorts
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short
, there are several reasons for
health problem
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a health problem
health problems
, and I strongly believe that both governments and individuals should join hands to improve the situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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