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some government have banned smoking in public places

#government #places
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First
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 of all,
smkoking
the act of smoking tobacco or other substances
smoking
effect
Suggestion
affects
affect
 more health of the human. Not only the
smokers but
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smokers, but
also
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 the community and social. Specially, children
is easily influented
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are easily influenced
is easily influenced
 in the growing stages.
For example
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, in the crowd one person
smoke
Suggestion
smokes
, everyone
aroud
in the area or vicinity
around
 must suffer cigarettes smoke and they
also
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 have risk respiratory disease, cancers...
Honestly it
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Honestly, it
 is proven that cigarettes consist many
kind
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kinds
 of
toxics causing
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toxic, causing
toxic causing
taxes causing
 serious harm to a person's
healt
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
heart
head
.
the
Suggestion
The
 number of people who died each year from smoking with heart diseases, lung cancer... Another reason, the smell of cigarettes
make
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makes
 everyone around unpleasant and annoying. To illustrate, in the restaurant, cafe or workplace, cigarette
smells
Suggestion
smell
 clinging to food and clothes. It makes them
unfortable
impossible to forget
unforgettable
 and the one is
implolite
not polite
impolite
 to everyone around.
In addition
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 to, smoking affect to the environment destroyed day by day by cigarette and making cigarettes.
Morever it
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Moreover, it
Moreover it
 takes more money for
tabacoo
leaves of the tobacco plant dried and prepared for smoking or ingestion
tobacco
 production In summary, the government decided correctly in banning smoking in public places.
This
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help
Suggestion
helps
 the country
dicrease
decrease in size, extent, or range
decrease
decreased
decreases
 death rate caused by
tabacco
leaves of the tobacco plant dried and prepared for smoking or ingestion
tobacco
 diseases and a positive
develpoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
.
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