some government have banned smoking in public places

First
of all,
smkoking
the act of smoking tobacco or other substances
smoking
effect
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affects
affect
more health of the human. Not only the
smokers but
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smokers, but
also
the community and social. Specially, children
is easily influented
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are easily influenced
is easily influenced
in the growing stages.
For example
, in the crowd one person
smoke
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smokes
, everyone
aroud
in the area or vicinity
around
must suffer cigarettes smoke and they
also
have risk respiratory disease, cancers...
Honestly it
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Honestly, it
is proven that cigarettes consist many
kind
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kinds
of
toxics causing
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toxic, causing
toxic causing
taxes causing
serious harm to a person's
healt
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
heart
head
.
the
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The
number of people who died each year from smoking with heart diseases, lung cancer... Another reason, the smell of cigarettes
make
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makes
everyone around unpleasant and annoying. To illustrate, in the restaurant, cafe or workplace, cigarette
smells
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smell
clinging to food and clothes. It makes them
unfortable
impossible to forget
unforgettable
and the one is
implolite
not polite
impolite
to everyone around.
In addition
to, smoking affect to the environment destroyed day by day by cigarette and making cigarettes.
Morever it
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Moreover, it
Moreover it
takes more money for
tabacoo
leaves of the tobacco plant dried and prepared for smoking or ingestion
tobacco
production In summary, the government decided correctly in banning smoking in public places.
This
help
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helps
the country
dicrease
decrease in size, extent, or range
decrease
decreased
decreases
death rate caused by
tabacco
leaves of the tobacco plant dried and prepared for smoking or ingestion
tobacco
diseases and a positive
develpoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
.
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