Write an essay (500-700 words) about a place making you provoke intimacy.

I have been a fan of
cosmics especially
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comics, especially
comics especially
Conan Detective since I was a child.
Therefore
, I always have a great ambition
to set
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set
foot on British soil where there is Big Ben – the largest Clock Tower in the world and it is
also
the
place
where the main character confesses his love to his childhood girlfriend. Big Ben is the great bell in the clock tower on the eastern end of the Houses of Parliament in London. The booming 13.5 ton
bells
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bell
first
rang out in 1859.
Officially
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Office
Big Ben is only the name of the biggest of the five bells in the clock tower
also
known as St Stephen’s Tower. Big Ben, though, is a very striking and enormous landscape, it brings me to evoke intimacy whenever I hear its name even I have never visited
this
place
.
Firstly
, Big Ben is obviously
famous
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a famous place
the famous place
place
where many people all over the world like me want to visit. I
also
spend my
time
to find out and research on Big Ben very much. I watch movies, read
magazines even
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magazines, even
collect pictures which relate to Big Ben.
Therefore
, it’s beneficial for me to enrich the knowledge about Big Ben as well as England.
As a result
, whenever
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
see images or hear any information about Big Ben, I always feel very familiar with
this
name. Big Ben even appears in my mind magically and it looks as if I were in the front of it. I am really burning to know how Big Ben is in real life.
Furthermore
, because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
’m greatly keen on reading Conan Detective cosmic, I love both of
main characters
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the main characters
: Shinichi Kudo and Ran Mori. They are friends,
soulmates
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Soulmates
sometimes
even a very adorable couple who all readers admire. I am specially
into
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in
the moment when Shin bravely makes a very great decision to bare his heart to Ran under the Big Ben. It is
undoubtedly romantic scene
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an undoubtedly romantic scene
which totally makes everyone moved. Big Ben seems to become a witness for
love
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the love
of Shin and Ran.
This
also induce
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also induces
me to keep falling back into memories in the past when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
was given a beautiful watch with a small Big Ben image insides on my birthday from my dear friend. He surprisingly gave me a small box and told me not to open it until he went. I was still extremely delighted though whatever his gift was.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
did not know that it was the
last
time
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
met him as well as the
last
watch he gave to me. It is believed that Big Ben is a very crucial architectural landmark of London with its extraordinary beauty. People come and admire Big Ben and hustle in the crowd in order to capture original Big Ben images.
Nonetheless
, when
time
passes, people leave, and Big Ben turns back its silent way which it has existed for a long
time
. No one says, nothing changes and Big Ben still
stands
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stand
alone and continues its duty.
In
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At
a certain
time
, I feel like I know the feeling of loneliness when I work, gossip and laugh with my friends, my companions, or all people around
everyday
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every day
, and after those very busy days, I just feel alone even isolated at night. I seem not be able to confide in an empathetic person who can help me. I have
also
suffered from
this
mood; so it is easier for me to understand as well as sympathize with Big Ben. “Who you are or how you value” may be questions we tend to wonder
everyday
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every day
, every night but we have no answer. No one can help us to give clear and specific explanation. I am
also
aware of
this but
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this, but
it is more significant for me to show my strengths, my value by actions
instead
of waiting for compliments from others. Big Ben is the same as me because it has stood alone day by day, from years to years and is completely responsible for adjusting the
time
in the world. In brief, not only is Big Ben my very beloved
place but
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place, but
also
my healing one. Thanks to it,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
seem to make
effort
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an effort
efforts
the effort
to study, to do progressively so as to pursue my dream. One day,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will have my own photos with my gorgeous Big Ben.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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