In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, many people argue that in countries with
the high
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the highest
higher
highest
unemployment rates, primary
school
students who are deemed as unemployable in the future should not be offered secondary
education
. From my perspective, I completely disagree with
this
point of view for several reasons.
First
of all, it is undeniable that the prediction of upturns and downturns of
job market
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the job market
a job market
is difficult. At one period there may be a demand for workers in many sectors of a country’s economy.
Therefore
,
education system
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the education system
needs to prepare large numbers of students up to and beyond secondary
school
level to meet the needs of employers.
For example
, while technology is replacing many traditional jobs in
such
areas as agriculture and transport, it is
also
creating a variety of
job
opportunities in other sectors.
As a result
, it is impossible to say how many highly-educated young people will be required for the nation’s workforce.
In addition
, secondary
education
plays a significant role in building soft skills for young people.
For instance
, at secondary
school
level, students are required to work on group assignments or presentations, which they need to coordinate ideas and manage
team
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teams
.
This
,
consequently
, would help them get insights
to
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into
team
spirits
an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
sports
and develop collaboration and communication skills. In
this
way, students who are considered as no hope of finding a
job
when at primary
school
can have better chances of getting employed. In conclusion, for all reasons mentioned above, I wholly disagree with the view that it is unnecessary for
government
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the government
governments
to offer secondary
education
for primary
school
pupils who will not have good prospects to find a
job
in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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