Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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It can be seen that, the

diffrences

the quality of being unlike or dissimilar

differences

in dieting and living habits between the past

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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

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nowadays have changed. Therefor, today's people should been had a solution so that they can burn calories.

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, one of the problems that they do not know how to keep fit right.

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, we should consider people's living habits in the past. It is obvious that they seemed

more healthier

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healthier

than now because we did not have

technology

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the technology

or variety

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food

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at that

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the citizens of the world in the past spent more

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activities outside

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as playing sports or doing exercises. Fortunately, they were not busy for working and they often kept

thier

of them or themselves

their

mind complete peace. As for now, people work out less than before because they waste

time

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focusing on technology

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as playing video games or watching TV too much. The most important that appearance of fast

food

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is making they get obese.

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reason

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the reason

a reason

why they choose fast

food

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than cook a meal by

thierself

of or concerning this or that

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because they do not have enough

time

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to cook.

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, stress is one of the cause make them get fat.

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, the amount of fast

food

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in US was consumed is the highest in the world, the consequence of eating fast

food

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makes Americans

can not

cannot

keep fit than others To sum up, there are so many

way

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ways

to get into shape. If we want to burn up a lot of calories, we should try to do exercises and keep well balance diet or change some daily actives.

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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

Your opinion

It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people think that competitive sports are important for a child education, oth ers think that it has negative effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.