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A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him /her in his/her country.you have never been there before and you need some inform before you leave. Write a letter to the friend . In the letter : Request advise about the gift for his or her family ask about activities and clothing in his/her country Find out about the food

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Hi Ahmad. I hope you
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are doing well in Pakistan.As I came back from the gym and, I acquired your letter with a plane ticket in it.
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, you made me so thrilled because I missed our time together.
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, I have never been to
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Pakistan before
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 now I am coming it is vitally important for me to get you and your family gifts. I am to you for the first time and I need you to advise me
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 shall I get for all
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 guys, in
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 email me everything, which I arranged for you and your family.
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, I do not know what your parents will like so let me explain it all in detail though, I don't want to come
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 at all. The
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things which are getting my attention are what type of activities, you have planned for and I am so curious
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pakistani
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 food.Those mutton chops and rice dish you showed me looked so good. I will be there soon. Your friend Umar
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, aim to connect ideas more smoothly across sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Clarify the sequence of ideas using headings or transition words to improve the logical structure.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, such as asking about gifts, activities, and food preferences, ensuring a complete response.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend about a visit, maintaining a suitable writing tone.
coherence cohesion
A good greeting and closing establish a personal connection with your friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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