Nowadays, some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computers. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that via computers, people can access to the
information
of historical items and artefacts, museums and
art
exhibitions are of little importance in these years. While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
accept that people can use computers to view those items,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would say that museums and
art
galleries are
also
pivotal and should continue
be
Suggestion
being
valued. It is understandable as to why people can obtain
information
about historical samples and work of
art
on computers
,
Accept space
,
rather than visit the museums and
art
galleries.
First
,
this
practice which enables people to search for an object
with
Suggestion
by
just typing a few characters, saves people a large amount of time. Rather than travelling and spending nearly a day on museums and
art
exhibits, they can access any
information
from their bedrooms at any time that they want.
Second
, with the advent of scanning technology available on the Internet, people can see more details of a historical item or an
art
work.
Art
learners,
for example
, can zoom either in or out an image to view patterns of a piece of painting is even difficult for
naked eye
Suggestion
the naked eye
to see.
Nevertheless
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would argue that the value of public museums and
art
galleries should not be underestimated. Visiting some places like museums and
art
exhibits can provide people with hands-on experiences. While people can feel an artefact on a screen from only one sense
that is
vision
Suggestion
the vision
, at an actual place, they are inclined to employ more other their senses like touch.
In addition
, museums and galleries
containning
include or contain; have as a component
containing
reliable sources of
information
tend to be maintained by a group of experts, who recognizes whether the objects are historically important. Contrary to these places, Computer-based
information
are often obtained
Suggestion
is often obtained
and collected by
odinary
not exceptional in any way especially in quality or ability or size or degree
ordinary
people, which might be unreliable. In conclusion, it seems to me that online presentations can offer
convienent way
Suggestion
a convenient way
convenient way
for people to obtain
information
on
historical
Suggestion
history
or
art
works, but it cannot replace the exhibition halls and
art
galleries.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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