In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

One typical issue about which sociologists need to be profoundly concern is the suggestion for teenagers
to take
Suggestion
take
a gap year for working and travelling before going to tertiary school. The practice, all the same, results in both benefits and problems. One plus point can be that teenagers who spend their time travelling to other places to have
broader view
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a broader view
of life and
better
marked by strong resentment or cynicism
bitter
personal experience which are not mentioned in academic study.
For example
, I used to take a
first
year of my university to enjoy Japanese living and some other typical cultures. After that trip, I am able to be more independent to take advantage of what I have learned from Japanese discipline and punctuation to cope with the challenges of student life. Another
addition
Suggestion
added
benefit is that youngsters would have more time to consider the most appropriate job matching their abilities. As a matter of fact, it is easier for them to determine what actually want to do almost adult life. As for
downside
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the downside
, the most important danger is that the students tend to forget almost the fundamental knowledge so that they must re-adapt to keeping up with the deadline of assignments and upcoming lessons.
Otherwise
, they could suffer a loss of time and money by not carefully planning their learning schedule.
This
does lead to stop their university course to continue a particular job in spite of the fact that academic qualification is essential for getting a reasonable career. In a nutshell, there is no doubt that taking a year off is
significant encouragement
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a significant encouragement
to those before starting university studies, but there are both pros and cons as discussed earlier.
However
, I am convinced that the former can outweigh the later in the most of
cases
Suggestion
the cases
.

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