International tourism is the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, this trend often causes tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Agree or disagree

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In the modern society

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people tend to take a journey more than ever before

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This

could lead to the growing industry of tourism. While some people argue that

this

trend bring some issues, I believe that

this

is a better manner for the close-knit relationships over the globe. For a variety of

reasonswhy

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reasons why

visitor could adverse affect

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nation

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, the amount of traveller

comming

of the relatively near future

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into

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dramatically

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increase

, which the government could not control entirely

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as environment

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heritage

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so forth. It means

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the unawareness of those might be shortage view

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they

not only litter but

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aren't only littering, but

aren't only littering but

also

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do away with, cause the destruction or undoing of

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some heritage belonging to the

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nation's

assets.

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, some of them have a tendency

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finding a decent job

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which might

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the career opportunity of the local.

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from the concerned above, I

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believe that people get closer to each other with different backgrounds via travelling to the other

nation

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is due to the fact that travelling is essential to broaden one's mind and knowledge.

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the diversified food could be bridged a gap

throught

from beginning to end

through

going oversea

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which not only attempt a new one but enjoying cuisines with fully atmosphere.

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, people have access to the new custom

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their country

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Travelling

also

seem like a harmonious way between each

nation

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leading the enlarge budget of the

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the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

via the taxation system. To sum up

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it is undeniable that there are still issues

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the tourism industry

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of both local and foreigner.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Grammar mistakes
 

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281 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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International tourism is the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, this trend often causes tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal ,oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option?