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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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People have different views about international tourism. While I agree it can raise problems between countries, I would claim that it contributes significantly in improving the understanding between the local and tourists. On the one hand, the most obvious reason why many people oppose international tourism is the misunderstanding of foreign tourists about the local culture.
For example
, Middle Eastern countries have strict codes of conduct and dressing, and they always expect international tourists to follow their customs.
However
, not many foreign visitors pay attention to these strict codes.
This
Suggestion
Thus
,
as a result
, lead to various cases that the local attacked tourists because of their disrespectful
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and dressing. These unfortunate incidents,
therefore
, result in tensions between countries.
On the other hand
, I suppose that travelling abroad is an effective way for individuals to acquire knowledge about other cultures. While the media,
such
 as TV or newspapers, give people some foreign culture exposure, overseas tourists have opportunities to get authentic and unique experiences which would definitely help them gain deeper insights into the local customs and traditions. As a consequence,
this
 can make a great contribution to raising individual awareness of the cultural diversity. In
this
 way, international travelling can facilitate people to establish and maintain relationships in
this
 day. In conclusion,
although
 international tourism could lead to tensions between countries due to the misconduct of foreign visitors, I firmly believe that it is one of the best ways for tourists to broaden their horizons about the diversity of cultures.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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