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Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter: explain why you have gone to live in the new city describe the place where you are living invite your friend to come and see you Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear John, It has been a long time since we
last
 met each other, but I'
ve
 not forgotten the beautiful memories that we had together during our college times. After two months of finishing my studies, I got a job offer in a reputed Financial Company as a Loan Officer at their Head Office in Mississauga City. I was quite far from the Scarbourough, so I quickly took a decision to shift from the Scarbourough to Mississauga. As you know, I love to socialize, so
this
 is a perfect city for me to live in as it's very crowded, and the number of parks and community centres are there where I can spend my free time, and socialise with others.
Also
, I'm a shopaholic, so there are a number of shopping malls where I can shop. Square One is the biggest mall that I'
ve
 ever seen. A variety of food stores are there, but I'
ve
 not tried all yet. I wanted to invite you to visit my place. I'
ve
 some plans to explore new places and try new dishes in
this
 city with you. How about we meet up on the coming long weekend? It will be great to catch up again soon. Get back to me as soon as you can so we can plan everything
accordingly
. Best Wishes, Alicia Liberty.
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task achievement
Consider elaborating a bit more on the reasons why the new city suits your lifestyle and work. This will enhance the completeness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea without blending multiple concepts, to improve clarity and cohesion.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and inviting tone, perfect for a friendly correspondence.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are well-crafted, making the letter feel personal and engaging.
logical structure
The logical structure of the letter is strong, making it easy to follow the writer's points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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